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24-10-2013, 06:10 PM
Is this any good?
THE NORIAD

BOOK ONE

Sing in me Supertramp, Gods of the Multiverse!
May your transcendental beauty
Aid me as I tell the story of Chuck Norris
Protector of Earth and his miraculous
Adventures across the great world,
Nobly serving Abraham Lincoln, his creator who
Shines brighter than the sun, and
Morgan Freeman who employs his strength
And valor to protect the people of
Earth from those who would do them harm.
Now, let me begin the tale of his ventures
With the story of his immaculate creation.

It's my epic invocation of Supertramp (the band) for an epic I'm writing.

Sound good?
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24-10-2013, 06:25 PM
RE: Is this any good?
Sounds like a teenager pulled out the old thesaurus. I only say that because it sounds like something I might have written in my teens.

Not a fan of this particular piece, but thats mostly due to the subject and pop-culture references.
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24-10-2013, 06:28 PM
RE: Is this any good?
So does this call upon Cthulhu? Consider

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24-10-2013, 06:38 PM
RE: Is this any good?
(24-10-2013 06:25 PM)WeAreTheCosmos Wrote:  Sounds like a teenager pulled out the old thesaurus. I only say that because it sounds like something I might have written in my teens.

Not a fan of this particular piece, but thats mostly due to the subject and pop-culture references.

Yeah... too much caffeine in the afternoon and lack of the internet (and lack of a thesaurus mind you) lead me to script out this whole theology thing around Abe Lincoln. In the future I hope I have more friends so I don't have as much time for things like this.

So no bueno? I'll revise

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Also the Epic of Gilgamesh didn't help either.
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24-10-2013, 06:52 PM
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Morgan Freeman is a closet Atheist, I reckon he will out himself soon if he hasn't allready.

Theism is to believe what other people claim, Atheism is to ask "why should I".
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24-10-2013, 07:12 PM
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(24-10-2013 06:52 PM)sporehux Wrote:  Morgan Freeman is a closet Atheist, I reckon he will out himself soon if he hasn't allready.

It's all a ploy in His mission to serve the Top-hatted one.
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