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30-04-2014, 07:07 AM
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FREEDOM FROM RELIGION

Suicidal Muslims in Saudi Arabia
Call us terrorist
For being atheist.

Their no better than Jews thinking their magic people,
Claiming to be a chosen people,
Speaking peace yet blowing up people.

Treating uneducated women like cattle,
Sending misguided children out to battle,
All for an illusion that crashing a jet
Gets their bullshit filled Allah wet.

Intimidating with beheading videos.
We’re no better delivering death from drones.

Brainwashing is not a trade of us,
That one belongs to the religious
From Shiva to Jesus.

By us
I mean the U.S.
Where we have freedom from religion.

Homophobic Catholics hate relations other than hetero
Yet pedophile priest holding down boys are free to go
Which makes the juries mind blow.

Claiming a wafer and wine cure hunger,
They pass around a golden plate for taxation
Only none of it to heal starvation.

Those in poverty are wrapped in misery
While a Pope lives in luxury
As he gives his blessing to Ferraris.

Raising girls to be submissive prudes
Boys are taught their nature is cursed
With inaccurate sex-ed.

Brainwashing is not a trade of us,
That one belongs to the religious
From Shiva to Jesus.

By us
I mean the U.S.
Where we have freedom from religion.

Freedom is not the right to discriminate,
It is protection from forced religion
And propaganda filled education.

Freedom to practice belief and skepticism
With equal expression for all isms.

Laws based on subjective morality
For a species that is evolutionary.

For all that oppose this peace
Have fun living life a lie.

Brainwashing is not a trade of us,
That one belongs to the religious
From Shiva to Jesus.

By us
I mean the U.S.
Where we have freedom from religion.
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14-05-2014, 06:27 PM
RE: Poets' Corner (Serious Poems)
Though you may not guess it from my activities online, I was a closet brony in my life outside of the internet until extremely recently. I wrote the following for my school magazine:




I really want for you to see,
And understand quite perfectly,
That when you people look at me,
You do not see a Brony.


I need for you to understand,
Before this mess gets out of hand,
And it time I take a stand,
And say I'm not a Brony.


For Bronyism isn't right,
As I'm reminded every night,
I see online a spiteful fight:
A fight against the Bronies.


They say that bronies must be gay,
"They're freaks and morons," they all say.
"The shows for girls and there's no way
A boy can be a brony."


Why should I risk their scorn and hate?
They'd win were I to take the bait;
Perhaps this torture is my fate
Once they know I'm a Brony.


But hold a moment! Wasn't pink
A manly color -- now I think?
To just give up would really stink.
Who cares if I'm a Brony?


There is no reason I can give
to let them dictate how I live,
So it is time for me to shrive
And tell you I'm a Brony.


I watch the show 'most every day.
If you don't like it, go away!
I don't know why you'd want to stay
If you do not like Bronies.


I do not care just what is said.
I will not let it hurt my head.
I do not wish that I were dead,
Because I am a Brony.


It will not keep me up at night,
It will not make me join this fight,
And I assume that it's all right
If you know I'm a Brony.

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(Okay, I added that last part.)Tongue

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20-05-2014, 10:38 AM
RE: Poets' Corner (Serious Poems)
(14-05-2014 06:27 PM)Teen-skeptic-go! Wrote:  Though you may not guess it from my activities online, I was a closet brony in my life outside of the internet until extremely recently. I wrote the following for my school magazine:




I really want for you to see,
And understand quite perfectly,
That when you people look at me,
You do not see a Brony.


I need for you to understand,
Before this mess gets out of hand,
And it time I take a stand,
And say I'm not a Brony.


For Bronyism isn't right,
As I'm reminded every night,
I see online a spiteful fight:
A fight against the Bronies.


They say that bronies must be gay,
"They're freaks and morons," they all say.
"The shows for girls and there's no way
A boy can be a brony."


Why should I risk their scorn and hate?
They'd win were I to take the bait;
Perhaps this torture is my fate
Once they know I'm a Brony.


But hold a moment! Wasn't pink
A manly color -- now I think?
To just give up would really stink.
Who cares if I'm a Brony?


There is no reason I can give
to let them dictate how I live,
So it is time for me to shrive
And tell you I'm a Brony.


I watch the show 'most every day.
If you don't like it, go away!
I don't know why you'd want to stay
If you do not like Bronies.


I do not care just what is said.
I will not let it hurt my head.
I do not wish that I were dead,
Because I am a Brony.


It will not keep me up at night,
It will not make me join this fight,
And I assume that it's all right
If you know I'm a Brony.

[Image: Pinkie_Pie_haters_gonna_hate.gif]
(Okay, I added that last part.)Tongue

I'll tell you exactly why people don't like bronies. It's not because they're hateful sons of bitches (not always), it's not because they just find anything to put you down. It's because they don't get it. I don't get it. I've watched an episode and I'd rather be a Spongebob fanboy than a brony. I really don't understand.

I'm not going to insult you or tell you that you shouldn't like it, paint your whole room pink for all I care, but damn do I think it's weird...

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20-05-2014, 11:29 AM
RE: Poets' Corner (Serious Poems)
(14-05-2014 06:27 PM)Teen-skeptic-go! Wrote:  Though you may not guess it from my activities online, I was a closet brony in my life outside of the internet until extremely recently. I wrote the following for my school magazine:




I really want for you to see,
And understand quite perfectly,
That when you people look at me,
You do not see a Brony.


I need for you to understand,
Before this mess gets out of hand,
And it time I take a stand,
And say I'm not a Brony.


For Bronyism isn't right,
As I'm reminded every night,
I see online a spiteful fight:
A fight against the Bronies.


They say that bronies must be gay,
"They're freaks and morons," they all say.
"The shows for girls and there's no way
A boy can be a brony."


Why should I risk their scorn and hate?
They'd win were I to take the bait;
Perhaps this torture is my fate
Once they know I'm a Brony.


But hold a moment! Wasn't pink
A manly color -- now I think?
To just give up would really stink.
Who cares if I'm a Brony?


There is no reason I can give
to let them dictate how I live,
So it is time for me to shrive
And tell you I'm a Brony.


I watch the show 'most every day.
If you don't like it, go away!
I don't know why you'd want to stay
If you do not like Bronies.


I do not care just what is said.
I will not let it hurt my head.
I do not wish that I were dead,
Because I am a Brony.


It will not keep me up at night,
It will not make me join this fight,
And I assume that it's all right
If you know I'm a Brony.

[Image: Pinkie_Pie_haters_gonna_hate.gif]
(Okay, I added that last part.)Tongue

You just prompted me to watch an episode for the first time.



I'm as confused as ever.

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23-05-2014, 06:59 PM
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Isolation and Despair

Forever Lost in the seemingly endless void of Isolation, Forever lost in an ocean of despair. Only shadows of those I so desperately wish to touch, with shadows I desperately wish to love, only to watch as they pass me by. I reach out with my arm stretched out far, I reach out with my hand opened wide, only to watch as they push me away and pass me by. Never to know a world beyond my void of isolation, never knowing the world beyond this ocean of despair that which I walk. Never to know the warmth of another's hand, Forever cursed to the taunts of illusions of hope and love that I may never have as the shadows pass me by. I know not how I arrived in the ocean of despair, I know not of what trespasses which I commit to doom me to this seemingly endless void of despair. So I sit and I wait, I hear whispers from shadows that forever ignore me so. I sit and I wait with my arm stretched out far in this void of isolation, I sit and I wait with my hand held wide in this ocean of despair. For a day when a shadow will one day grab hold and save me from the world in which I am list, From a world of despair and isolation.


Labyrinth of my mind.

My Mind wanders and fades to places unknown.
Never able to quiet the voice inside.
Days go by and the world fades to shades of grey.

The voices, more each and every day.
Visions of my mind more frequent.
Feeling of Paranoia inside me.

I am lost in a labyrinth. A somber and eerie place.
Never knowing how I got here or where to return.
Here I am alone, confused and distressed.

Wandering through these illusionary halls in this labyrinth in my mind.
Gone Astray in a never ending trail of forks and turns.
Dead roots of trees unseen stretch across the hallway walls that once lead me to the light.

Leaves from plants I have never seen.
Covered in layers of dust and web.
Only to remind me of how addled I am.

Every step and every turn, the more gone I am.
Never able to go back the way I came.
For every step I take erases what was before me.

Never to return.
Never to escape.
Never to turn back and go the way I came.

Phantoms of what is never there, Haunting me with words never said.
My eyes to see those I have never met.
Clawing at my body with claws forged from fabricated bodies made of spurious flesh.

Now my mind wanders and fades and to the blackened void.
Now I speak with words never mine.
Seeing what was never there.

Touching what is made of air.
Because they are never there.
World around me I am unaware.

Now I reach an Impasse.
A turn that leads me to an end.
The darkness long since following me.

Never allowed me to rest.
Loosing myself in this encroaching void.
Observing as it draws near.

Please forgive me for the things I say
For my words are never mine.
Please forgive me for the things I do.

For my actions are never mine.
Watch over what I become.
Whoever I become, please forgive me and watch over me.

Lost forever in Madness.
Until I can regain my sanity and find the light once more.
Then I can find my way out of this labyrinth of my mind.

"We are all born Atheists, everyone of us. We are born without the Shackles of theism arresting our minds. It is not until we are poisoned by the fears and delusions of others that we become trapped in the psychopathic dream world of theism."

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23-05-2014, 07:34 PM
RE: Poets' Corner (Serious Poems)
(20-05-2014 10:38 AM)NL Atheist Wrote:  
(14-05-2014 06:27 PM)Teen-skeptic-go! Wrote:  Though you may not guess it from my activities online, I was a closet brony in my life outside of the internet until extremely recently. I wrote the following for my school magazine:




I really want for you to see,
And understand quite perfectly,
That when you people look at me,
You do not see a Brony.


I need for you to understand,
Before this mess gets out of hand,
And it time I take a stand,
And say I'm not a Brony.


For Bronyism isn't right,
As I'm reminded every night,
I see online a spiteful fight:
A fight against the Bronies.


They say that bronies must be gay,
"They're freaks and morons," they all say.
"The shows for girls and there's no way
A boy can be a brony."


Why should I risk their scorn and hate?
They'd win were I to take the bait;
Perhaps this torture is my fate
Once they know I'm a Brony.


But hold a moment! Wasn't pink
A manly color -- now I think?
To just give up would really stink.
Who cares if I'm a Brony?


There is no reason I can give
to let them dictate how I live,
So it is time for me to shrive
And tell you I'm a Brony.


I watch the show 'most every day.
If you don't like it, go away!
I don't know why you'd want to stay
If you do not like Bronies.


I do not care just what is said.
I will not let it hurt my head.
I do not wish that I were dead,
Because I am a Brony.


It will not keep me up at night,
It will not make me join this fight,
And I assume that it's all right
If you know I'm a Brony.

[Image: Pinkie_Pie_haters_gonna_hate.gif]
(Okay, I added that last part.)Tongue

I'll tell you exactly why people don't like bronies. It's not because they're hateful sons of bitches (not always), it's not because they just find anything to put you down. It's because they don't get it. I don't get it. I've watched an episode and I'd rather be a Spongebob fanboy than a brony. I really don't understand.

I'm not going to insult you or tell you that you shouldn't like it, paint your whole room pink for all I care, but damn do I think it's weird...


I suppose the innocence appeals to people like me. I'm not asking the whole world to convert to bronyism, I just don't want to be mocked because someone else doesn't 'get it'. They say ignorance is bliss, I find that ignorance is more often fear, hatred, and spite. Also, I prefer purple to pink. Tongue

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02-07-2014, 11:43 PM
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Thanks to DLJ for helping me improve my poem. I will hit you up the next time I want to post something to see what you think.

Alone

I hate the darkness
I hate the cold
I'm feeling lonely
I'm getting old
And I've never been so alone
No one to turn to
No one to blame
Lost is my innocence
Lost is my name
And I've never been so alone.
So much sacrifice
And nothing to show
Gone are the joys
That I used to know
And I've never been so alone
I'll build up my walls
So you can tear them down
I'll let you push me under
But I'll be damned if I'll drown

I have laughed, in bitterness and agony of heart, at the contrast between what I seem and what I am!
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02-07-2014, 11:51 PM
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(20-05-2014 10:38 AM)NL Atheist Wrote:  I'll tell you exactly why people don't like bronies. It's not because they're hateful sons of bitches (not always), it's not because they just find anything to put you down. It's because they don't get it. I don't get it. I've watched an episode and I'd rather be a Spongebob fanboy than a brony. I really don't understand.

I'm not going to insult you or tell you that you shouldn't like it, paint your whole room pink for all I care, but damn do I think it's weird...

You know what I don't get? Disliking someone because you don't understand them.

I have laughed, in bitterness and agony of heart, at the contrast between what I seem and what I am!
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03-07-2014, 12:10 AM
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(02-07-2014 11:43 PM)LostandInsecure Wrote:  Thanks to DLJ for helping me improve my poem. I will hit you up the next time I want to post something to see what you think.

Alone

I hate the darkness
I hate the cold
I'm feeling lonely
I'm getting old
And I've never been so alone
No one to turn to
No one to blame
Lost is my innocence
Lost is my name
And I've never been so alone.
So much sacrifice
And nothing to show
Gone are the joys
That I used to know
And I've never been so alone
I'll build up my walls
So you can tear them down
I'll let you push me under
But I'll be damned if I'll drown

Only real issue is æsthetics. You should separate your stanzas, and add some punctuation. Other than that, very emotional, the rhyme scheme is mostly consistent, and I like your repeated line, "And I've never been so alone." In the future, you could give your repeated line a resolution; here, it just vanishes.

Am I good at criticism?

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03-07-2014, 12:16 AM
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(03-07-2014 12:10 AM)TSG Wrote:  
(02-07-2014 11:43 PM)LostandInsecure Wrote:  Thanks to DLJ for helping me improve my poem. I will hit you up the next time I want to post something to see what you think.

Alone

I hate the darkness
I hate the cold
I'm feeling lonely
I'm getting old
And I've never been so alone
No one to turn to
No one to blame
Lost is my innocence
Lost is my name
And I've never been so alone.
So much sacrifice
And nothing to show
Gone are the joys
That I used to know
And I've never been so alone
I'll build up my walls
So you can tear them down
I'll let you push me under
But I'll be damned if I'll drown

Only real issue is æsthetics. You should separate your stanzas, and add some punctuation. Other than that, very emotional, the rhyme scheme is mostly consistent, and I like your repeated line, "And I've never been so alone." In the future, you could give your repeated line a resolution; here, it just vanishes.

Am I good at criticism?

I am sure you are, but I am clueless. The best I can do is write how I feel and give it a little rhythm and symmetry. If you have ideas for improvement pretend I know nothing about poetry (because it's true Tongue)

Stanza?

Give a line in a resolution?

I don't know why, but I just usually don't love punctuation in this type of poetry. I guess I could add some in.

I have laughed, in bitterness and agony of heart, at the contrast between what I seem and what I am!
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