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18-09-2013, 12:24 PM
RE: Poets' Corner (Serious Poems)
(18-09-2013 12:02 PM)Ameron1963 Wrote:  "I know, I know! Like Girly said... I couldn't resist. If you highlight the whole thing it's a bit easier."

Thanks. I didn't know I could do that.

I know I'm about to commit a literary sin, by giving my interpretation of your poem, but I'm going for it anyways! If you're like me, you may not be completely sure what it means, yourself.

But here it goes! All who wish may send out the hounds!

Anyways:

I see the white prism of light, turning into a rainbow, then to umbrae as God. Hence the FLUFF! response (from you?)

The rest I see as aspiration's we can strive for ourselves. . . .?

Thanks for the interpretation, I like it!

I can see how the poem would seem 'god' like, especially since I threw in the word heavens.

The truth is, I am fascinated with light. The way people get obsessed with food (foodies) or others with touch and sensuality- well, my 'thing' is light. I always notice what kind of lighting (natural, florescent, tungsten/ soft, harsh, dim, bright/etc) is present, how it falls, the mood it creates, etc. Light is very powerful in many ways, from emotions to life itself. So light was my platform.

The 'umbrae' is directly defined as: the fully shaded inner region of a shadow cast by an opaque object, esp. the area on the earth or moon experiencing the total phase of an eclipse.

At this point the poem evolved into reaching passed dark (though it never mentions 'dark') to work for the light, to attain it. That could be the external God you imagined, but I see it more as a reaching through any tough, dark bit because light, or dream, wishes, happiness etc, can be reached. It is there for the taking, but sometimes it needs to be worked for. Eternal heartbeat is the reveal that it is there as much as the shadow or dark.

I'm not sure if I explained well, but that's kind of the inspiration. Same thing, really. Ha ha. Smile
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18-09-2013, 12:53 PM
RE: Poets' Corner (Serious Poems)
"Light"

For LadyJane:

I stepped among the morning dew, and knew the true color of rainbows!

Rain traveled, in streams, multicolored drops, as the Sun found the beauty of the color of the atmosphere.

And the dew disappeared.

And the colors bounced, sang, found secret homes to illuminate.

Bright luminescence found every detail of the world, even tears of joy.


But I found shelter with moles.

With worms.

I ate acorn's in the bows of majestic oaks.

In the blackest space on earth.

A tree, who reached for the life if light!
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18-09-2013, 01:57 PM
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Thanks! Beautiful.

The mighty Oak!

"The greatest Oak was once a little nut that held its ground!"
~unknown

I have one in my backyard, just a little guy right now.
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23-09-2013, 07:21 PM
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This is my first poem ever so don't expect it to be much. I started thinking of this during school and I felt compelled to post it on this sight. Thanks.


Somewhere tucked amongst the stars, lies a planet much like ours.

Its sky is blue, its grass is green,

man can only wonder what lies within its radiating sheen.

To this mystical place I must go, to add to the list of which I know.

And I know,

that we are not alone,

we are simply searching for yet another place to call our own.
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23-09-2013, 07:22 PM
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I love everyone's poems on this page.
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27-09-2013, 02:04 PM
RE: Poets' Corner (Serious Poems)
(23-09-2013 07:21 PM)UndercoverAtheist Wrote:  This is my first poem ever so don't expect it to be much. I started thinking of this during school and I felt compelled to post it on this sight. Thanks.


Somewhere tucked amongst the stars, lies a planet much like ours.

Its sky is blue, its grass is green,

man can only wonder what lies within its radiating sheen.

To this mystical place I must go, to add to the list of which I know.

And I know,

that we are not alone,

we are simply searching for yet another place to call our own.

I hope you write more!
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27-09-2013, 02:32 PM
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Bloody hell - I'm trying to write a poem!
so go downstairs and leave me alone
I didn't ask you to beat up my muse
to leave it broken and lying prone.

As much as I try and as much as I want
you won't give up and leave me be
curse you to a dark bottomless pit
I hate you - I really hate you - ADD.

Confused

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27-09-2013, 03:00 PM
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The day is gone that was once ahead of us. The day after tomorrow. The day of death and depth!

That day is below us. Sinking to the center of a star!

The day is above us, luring us to come and see! The day of naked death!

Below us was all the glory of sex and donuts. French fries, spoken words, Single hours and poetry left to linger and fade.

Above us nothing floated and nothing gave us the direction we were bread and died for!

The day is above us, below us: gone!

Today it wraps us in its fearful comfort!

It goes away.

And we beg for just one day!

Steal all we have! Lose us in the confusion!

But be another day!

Let us linger another day!
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28-09-2013, 09:11 AM
RE: Poets' Corner (Serious Poems)
(27-09-2013 03:00 PM)Ameron1963 Wrote:  The day is gone that was once ahead of us. The day after tomorrow. The day of death and depth!

That day is below us. Sinking to the center of a star!

The day is above us, luring us to come and see! The day of naked death!

Below us was all the glory of sex and donuts. French fries, spoken words, Single hours and poetry left to linger and fade.

Above us nothing floated and nothing gave us the direction we were bread and died for!

The day is above us, below us: gone!

Today it wraps us in its fearful comfort!

It goes away.

And we beg for just one day!

Steal all we have! Lose us in the confusion!

But be another day!

Let us linger another day!

I'm really enjoying watching as your poetry evolves AmIOne. You have a natural talent for it. Thumbsup

As it was in the beginning is now and ever shall be, world without end. Amen.
And I will show you something different from either
Your shadow at morning striding behind you
Or your shadow at evening rising to meet you;
I will show you fear in a handful of dust.
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28-09-2013, 01:33 PM
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Thanks, Girly! I have an audience of two, apparently. But that's not really important. I write these things because I enjoy writing them. I haven't even saved them. I'm an old dude! Not tech savvy, at all. But I like some of them! I wonder if I should start a blog or something? What do you think?
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