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19-10-2017, 08:50 AM
RE: Poets' Corner
(19-10-2017 06:47 AM)DLJ Wrote:  
(18-10-2017 11:40 AM)Atothetheist Wrote:  I had to write poems for my intro to creative writing class, so I thought I would throw them up here and see what you think.
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"had to write poems"
deadline driven artistry
is not how it works

Dodgy

Nothing wrong with it. We sometimes stumble across means of expression based on the requirements of the moment.

AttT, liked "Blue".
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19-10-2017, 11:28 AM
RE: Poets' Corner
(19-10-2017 06:47 AM)DLJ Wrote:  
(18-10-2017 11:40 AM)Atothetheist Wrote:  I had to write poems for my intro to creative writing class, so I thought I would throw them up here and see what you think.
...

"had to write poems"
deadline driven artistry
is not how it works

Dodgy

Bowing DLJ, have mercy on my poor unpoetic soul.

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19-10-2017, 12:18 PM
RE: Poets' Corner
(19-10-2017 11:28 AM)Atothetheist Wrote:  
(19-10-2017 06:47 AM)DLJ Wrote:  "had to write poems"
deadline driven artistry
is not how it works

Dodgy

Bowing DLJ, have mercy on my poor unpoetic soul.

critique the system
compliments are transactions
sapience builds dreams

Yes

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20-10-2017, 12:35 PM
RE: Poets' Corner
(19-10-2017 12:18 PM)DLJ Wrote:  
(19-10-2017 11:28 AM)Atothetheist Wrote:  Bowing DLJ, have mercy on my poor unpoetic soul.

critique the system
compliments are transactions
sapience builds dreams

Yes

you pretentious prick
writing in haiku for fun
please end your life now

Big Grin Drinking Beverage

You know I love you DLJ, how have you been man?

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20-10-2017, 12:40 PM
RE: Poets' Corner
(20-10-2017 12:35 PM)Atothetheist Wrote:  
(19-10-2017 12:18 PM)DLJ Wrote:  critique the system
compliments are transactions
sapience builds dreams

Yes

you pretentious prick
writing in haiku for fun
please end your life now

Big Grin Drinking Beverage

You know I love you DLJ, how have you been man?

Who is "ku"
And why is he always hi
Outside of Colorado
And states where it is legal
The point is moot and nye.

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12-11-2017, 07:54 PM
RE: Poets' Corner
Lyrics, not poetry:

It's a gentle rain that lands
upong the ground inside my heart.
It's no great flood, threatening
to wash my world away,
just a soft little drizzle that
maybe softens up the earth.
But it washes out the poisons
and gives me a fresh start --
a cool wet night, giving promise
of the coming day
sweet and damp, the night
allows the new day's rebirth.

You can keep your gully-washers,
you can keep your hurricanes,
your howling winds and thunderclaps --
I'll keep this gentle rain,
You can tell yourself this is one more storm
that too will surely pass
and while this sweet rain washes me clean
you can delve into the past.

It's a sunny morning, and last night
is a distant miserable dream,
just one more page in my story
and surely not the last.
We came and went like a spring sunshower
and now a morning dawns anew.
I tried to speak my feelings
but you did not like the theme --
it was just one more perspective and
didn't fit the mold you'd cast.
But now the night is gone, with it the rain
and I'll drink the morning dew.

You can keep your feelings, keep your thoughts
and tell yourself you're right.
You can batten down my hatches if it
gets you through the night.
You can tell yourself this is one more storm
that too will surely pass.
No doubt it'll serve to tell the tale
in the mold you've cast.
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