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18-01-2017, 09:49 AM
Short story
Arath scanned the horizon with the farseeing device he had pulled from his pouch. As reports had claimed the sky was ablaze in the dropships of the monsters. Aliens were invading, unstoppable killing machines that would leave none of his people alive. The planetary defense stations had held them off less than a day, the gigantic battlestations that had protected his people for nearly a millennium hung now in the sky broken and burning. A chance encounter in space with this species so unlike the rest of the civilized universe had led t this. 1 year ago a distress signal from a far ranging space skimmer had reported contact and then the attack from the other vessel. Since then all had been waiting to see if this species of conquerors would eliminate another planet adding more to the long list of crimes perpetrated against the Galactic Alliance, such a pretty name for what had turned out to be nothing but disinterested trade partners that pulled all members of their respective races offworld as soon as the message was released.

Arath sighed and gave the order "Fight to the last, they are not taking prisoners." knowing he was merely delaying the inevitable. His people had been at peace for over 900 years; war was a thing of legend and myth. From myth to the death of his people a year, there must be some kind of cosmic joke there. Arath looked at the framed picture of his family and steeled himself for the coming conflict. A strange sound filled the command tower before a bright light flashed.

One mile away from the fallen tower an ugly armor-plated bipedal machine halted a blast shield was raised and the soldier inside spoke into his com "Base this is Red leader, confirmation on destruction of enemy Command and Communications tower. Permission to bring in the rest of Red Squadron and clear out any stragglers." "Permission Granted Red Leader." The soldier smiled and turned to see the Flagship land behind his Fighter Mech the United Earth Government flag emblazoned on the front before switching his comm over to his unit's assigned channel "Move out."

In a matter of hours the Earth assault fleet had eliminated yet another of the species that long ago had tried to prevent Mankind's journey to the stars. The blockade was meant to keep them from expanding before meeting certain goals these species had for any civilization entering the cosmos but Humanity took it as a grave insult and built up a strike fleet to break the blockade and to punish these arrogant species for trying to control the universe.

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18-01-2017, 12:06 PM
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That could be developed. I have an interesting twist, if you're looking to expand on the "tomato surprise" ending twist (that it's the humans doing the slaughtering) to that theme...

Angels.

Yes, the Heavenly Host. I've been kicking an idea around for quite some time but have never quite managed to put it into a form that works on paper: an alien species took note of us roughly 5000 years ago (c. 3000 BCE) and began to manipulate our population centers (Sumeria, Egypt, Indus Valley, China, etc) in order to try to steer humanity onto a course toward a successful and peaceful civilization... but we, being such a tribal-warfare based species, immediately made gods of our visitors and twisted what they had to say to suit our own tribal (or intra-tribal sociopolitical) purposes. Desperate, the aliens even began trying to intervene in our wars, but disagreements about whom to support "for the betterment of humanity" led to even more bloodshed and strife.

Among the aliens back home, there came an increasing knowledge that these interventionist missions were having the opposite effect of that intended, and calls for isolationism began to arise. Finally, after the Romans executed one of the host-bodies of a Visitor (using a torture process that didn't allow him to simply return his consciousness to the ship, after the quick death of the host body, but forced him to suffer) in a particularly brutal way, almost all such missions were called off and prohibited, except for a few intelligence-gathering missions.

And Earth lay forgotten by that civilization, for the most part, for another 2000-2500 years, except for a few specialists who continued to study us and publish in journals almost nobody read.

Forgotten, that is, until the first human warships arrived in their star systems.

Anyway, the part I can never figure out is how to tell the story of the various interventions-- from Hari Krishna and the flying death-ray machines to the "send Prophets to the Hebrews" missions-- across such a span of history while also being able to tell a first-person version of the tale set in roughly the year 2500 CE, when humans arrive with guns blazing.

But if it can be accomplished, I think it could be a Nebula/Hugo winner. Smile

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18-01-2017, 12:21 PM
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(18-01-2017 12:06 PM)RocketSurgeon76 Wrote:  That could be developed. I have an interesting twist, if you're looking to expand on the "tomato surprise" ending twist (that it's the humans doing the slaughtering) to that theme...

Angels.

Yes, the Heavenly Host. I've been kicking an idea around for quite some time but have never quite managed to put it into a form that works on paper: an alien species took note of us roughly 5000 years ago (c. 3000 BCE) and began to manipulate our population centers (Sumeria, Egypt, Indus Valley, China, etc) in order to try to steer humanity onto a course toward a successful and peaceful civilization... but we, being such a tribal-warfare based species, immediately made gods of our visitors and twisted what they had to say to suit our own tribal (or intra-tribal sociopolitical) purposes. Desperate, the aliens even began trying to intervene in our wars, but disagreements about whom to support "for the betterment of humanity" led to even more bloodshed and strife.

Among the aliens back home, there came an increasing knowledge that these interventionist missions were having the opposite effect of that intended, and calls for isolationism began to arise. Finally, after the Romans executed one of the host-bodies of a Visitor (using a torture process that didn't allow him to simply return his consciousness to the ship, after the quick death of the host body, but forced him to suffer) in a particularly brutal way, almost all such missions were called off and prohibited, except for a few intelligence-gathering missions.

And Earth lay forgotten by that civilization, for the most part, for another 2000-2500 years, except for a few specialists who continued to study us and publish in journals almost nobody read.

Forgotten, that is, until the first human warships arrived in their star systems.

Anyway, the part I can never figure out is how to tell the story of the various interventions-- from Hari Krishna and the flying death-ray machines to the "send Prophets to the Hebrews" missions-- across such a span of history while also being able to tell a first-person version of the tale set in roughly the year 2500 CE, when humans arrive with guns blazing.

But if it can be accomplished, I think it could be a Nebula/Hugo winner. Smile

Interesting idea. This was written based on the seed of how Aliens would perceive Humans if/when first contact is established. I might play around and use this as a cold open and then slide into a main story based on that universe.

As to your book you could have just an info dump Opening set in the meeting where they decide intervention is counter productive, having a Prosecutor list all the failed attempts and the problems it caused. Have a vote that ends with isolation winning by a single vote and then a massive time jump

*3000 years later...*

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18-01-2017, 12:23 PM
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Well if you win the Hugo based on the product of that fusion, I expect an invitation to your acceptance ceremony! Big Grin

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18-01-2017, 01:32 PM
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he'll also be buying rounds at the motel bar.
Nice bit of writing, fellows.
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19-01-2017, 08:26 AM
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(18-01-2017 12:21 PM)Revenant77x Wrote:  ...
As to your book you could have just an info dump Opening set in the meeting where they decide intervention is counter productive, having a Prosecutor list all the failed attempts and the problems it caused. Have a vote that ends with isolation winning by a single vote and then a massive time jump

*3000 years later...*

... or a 'relativity twist' where the timescales are different (a play on creationists and their 6 days = millennia shtick), hence the difficulty of micromanaging ... like elephants intervening in ant politics.

Revs,
I see your allegory. Complacent liberals and their symbiotic zeitgeist assuming that their socialistic, civil-rights defense-stations are the norm that can be taken for granted but in the event of a shift in the economic paradigm are no match for predator/prey barbarism. They are overrun by the Imperial StormTrumpers and the next four years...

Weeping

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