To My People (English Translation) - A short story I wrote - Feedback please
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11-01-2013, 05:39 PM
RE: To My People (English Translation) - A short story I wrote - Feedback please
(11-01-2013 04:06 PM)kingschosen Wrote:  Thanks Smile

Well, I didn't want to go into too much detail about the aliens because I didn't want to hand over the surprise at the end.

But, you would suggest more detail?
After re-reading it im not so sure, It was the description of the Alien at the end that I was referring to. I can build a picture up of what it could look like in my head whilst im reading it, so maybe its better to leave it to the imagination of the reader.

For no matter how much I use these symbols, to describe symptoms of my existence.
You are your own emphasis.
So I say nothing.

-Bemore.
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RE: To My People (English Translation) - A short story I wrote - Feedback please - bemore - 11-01-2013 05:39 PM
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